[color=#000000]ok here are 2 poems i wrote last night, they are written based on what i was thinking.. i just threw a few words together and rhymed and yeah thats my thoughts:



Just eating, breathing and sleeping
This is my solitude and pain within the
depth of my hell
Why do you all ignore my pain and weeping?
Can

[quote:post_uid0="brokencuts"]you could start some indie band, if you got the vocals to back it up. :)[/quote]
lol

that poem sucked.


if you're gonna write poetry, atleast be creative with it.

instead of saying "MY LIFE IS SAD!"

you should use the basic useage of symbolism and imagry.

you basically followed maddox's sarcastic tutorial on "dark" poetry:

Quote:

Writing bad poetry is easy when you disregard meter, pace, and rhyming scheme. Just make sure to follow a few simple guidelines: 1. Never write about anything cheerful. Remember, you are a tortured artist. Be one. 2. Be sure to use the following words at least once per sentence, no fewer than 50 times per poem: lament, loathe, soul, darkness, bitter, agony, despair, misery, anguish, pain, suffer, woe, hate, death, love, sultry, angel, rose, acrid and nihilism. Nihilism is a good one because it comes up all the time in normal conversations. It's easy, here's a sample to get you started: fire... burning... agony... sultry shivers of a dark essence why am i tortured with this nihilistic existence? bitter... darkness... despair. notice the constant lower case? i added that touch to be unique. unique people type in lower case.

I'm just being honesty.



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